Score: 4

"Most unpleased"

submission: Dragon Boy

date: November 7, 2009

You have a Sevier flaw that has annoyed me. When I exited of course it saved because its automatic. I have done this about twice, on the second time I came back into the game naked no equipment no money but my dragon was still all the way grown and the spells was still learned by that one useless idiot.

Score: 3

"The grey , clouds this odd picture of a story."

submission: Ag-ep.1-"to Burn A Soul"

date: September 3, 2009

Me be the all powerful one of wierd cliffs you know. Ye told me of this flash. Quite considerably it could use alot of smoothing in the look, the movement is , well, fine. The concept wasn't very well conceived , but avid in conveying i suppose. Even though this is one of your beggining works. Use alot of effort into making somthing as perfect as you can , And it doesn't really matter how long as long as you do put a ton of effort. This hopefullly with sharpen your skills. I am a harsh judge

Score: 7

"Well done could be better,heres how."

submission: Dreamgate Escape

date: March 19, 2009

I liked many of the ambient ways you created the scary atmosphere. But here is the major thing you got wrong' Presence, and presentation of what was going to kill you. True making it that odd kind of obvous makes anticipation build and thus more scary. However the creatures them selvs were not drawn to look very scary no dark shading ect on them. How they presented them selvs was very quick and no little hints that told you it was pretty much inevedable that they were going to show up. Furthermore when they finally did it pretty much didnt tell you that somthing was wrong or about to happen that was bad' the only deamon**im guessing this is what they were**, that actually had that presence was the first one to be noticed imiedatly the Apprent do not read one. What would have even made him even better was to change the ambience a tad bit short of his apprence like maybe the lights of the room actually brightning Revieling the intire message. then its a Oh shi moment from there . The other thing that could have made it better is not nessacarly less obvous puzzles but more challenging' try to keep the obvousness of them in someway , so it doesnt slow down the pogression of the intire thing. you had it on the money to how fast things were to pogress just not alot of things to pogress with allowing for fast paced suspense compared to a well, zombie pased experience. Over all great and if you managed to read all this then thank ye and you diserve a cookie' to bad i dont have any :( . rating is a 7 out of 10. ps im a harsh critic even though i dont vote much